coa//011 establishes connection

14 06 2013

New readers — welcome! This blog is where I set up feedback threads for the latest draft story in progress. Every week, I post new scenes! Right now I’m up to story #11. You should probably start at story #1, though.

Current readers — Kelsey Jones is ready to sit down and tell you her story. And it’s a pretty crazy story, which quite appropriate in her case.

Getting this story out was like pulling teeth. I haven’t written something so free-floating and hazy and nervous and frightened since Sailor Nothing; there’s definitely parallels here  in how Kelsey deals with her world and how Himei does. The easiest way to go would be to tell it from 3rd person and let the narrator stay distant, but this feels like a very personal story from someone with a skewed perspective… it’ll have more impact being told in her own words.

Since I missed last week (my life has been kinda crazy with ups and downs) I decided I’d post this a day early for your weekend reading enjoyment. Let me know what you think in the comments below.

Don’t forget, the Create-a-Thing Challenge wraps at the end of the month. I’m looking forward to seeing what you’ve got!




6 responses

15 06 2013

That was excellent. Seems like Kelsey can tune into more than just Bedlam.

15 06 2013
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Indeed. Exactly what she’s tuning into I hope to reveal in this chapter. Or… maybe the next. Dunno how it’s gonna shake out yet.

15 06 2013

I love the water/air/void symbology. One small error, unless it was an author-intended slip on her part: “Penelope Smith”? Kelsey is Smith, Penny is Yates.

15 06 2013
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’d love to claim that’s some meaningful foreshadowing of an incredible plot twist nobody saw coming but sadly it’s a typo. I’ll fix in next update. Thanks!

15 06 2013

No, no. Dave is Smith. Kelsey is Jones.

What is Penny’s middle name, BTW/

15 06 2013

I vote for Lucy or something punny. XD But no, I bet Greg gave her a middle name of Elizabeth after her mom…

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