sf03 is taking tea in wonderland

25 07 2011

Just a pleasant afternoon’s chat over tea. With your worst enemy.

I rushed to get this update written in time for a midnight posting, thanks to my lack of DISCIPLINE and general laziness. But, once I sat down to write it, it came naturally. Gilbert and Jesse are very easy to write and plenty of fun, particularly since despite being married, Jesse remains very tsundere.

There were some good questions on the nature of the soul and how much the characters really know about what’s going on in the previous discussion thread. By the end of this chapter, or possibly sf04 (plans are not in stone yet) we should know more, but some questions simply will remain unanswered. A complete mechanical knowledge of all things religious stands in contrast to the concept of religion itself, which relies on faith. Those representing it know that as well, and won’t be coughing up the goods… but there will be enough for the story to make sense, I assure you.

What we’ve got here is the start of the journey towards those answers. And some wackiness along the way. And some danger. And some hard choices. Enjoy and feedback welcome.

NOTE: LiveJournal is completely borked today and MIGHT eat your comment. Please copy it to a clipboard first, and be persistent if it rejects it the first time; I crave feedback, as you all know.

I am absolutely dumping LJ as my primary means of collecting feedback for my next writing project after anachronauts; I will make sure LJ-faithful’ers will get the news they need, but I can’t rely on an unstable platform anymore.

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25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!
Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!
Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
lirazel

Fearsome!

Camille’s speech seems to be a cross between Una and Carrie. And Jessie seems to have grown up quite a bit.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Having kids changes you quite a bit. I’m drawing from direct observation of my sister, here — how it’s refocused her life and so on, and some of her views on parenting and priorities.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.
If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does
You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.
The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.
Hyphenation.
The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.
“They” exploded.
“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”
Hyphenation.
Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.
An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.
Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.
“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”
I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.
ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?
Gilbert uses American spelling here.
(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)
If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.
Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.
Hyphenation.
“The fellow may have swapped his team colours
Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.
“I share your concern, husband,
For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”
“Which is why she has to go with is, love.
“us.”
Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…
“seize”
I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.
If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does
You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.
The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.
Hyphenation.
The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.
“They” exploded.
“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”
Hyphenation.
Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.
An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.
Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.
“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”
I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.
ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?
Gilbert uses American spelling here.
(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)
If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.
Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.
Hyphenation.
“The fellow may have swapped his team colours
Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.
“I share your concern, husband,
For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”
“Which is why she has to go with is, love.
“us.”
Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…
“seize”
I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
loopychew

The Lar/Jesse showdown is pretty awesome, and I enjoyed reading it from Jesse’s perspective.

If ______ left a trail of wronged foes in my wake in the way he does

You’re missing an “I,” potentially italicized and/or bolded, here.

The twenty foot tall apparatus went up in a blast of white-hot flame.

Hyphenation.

The exploded four seconds later, enveloping them completely in a ball of blue-green flame.

“They” exploded.

“Errr… but sir, it did in fact self destruct,”

Hyphenation.

Wheedle’s Theory of Magical Evolution and Magical Intelligent Design are pretty funny, but the fact that the Goddesses exist and have been seen in this case cast a much better light towards the latter.

An impressive feat for a nine year old witch.

Hyphenation. Same thing with the following “nine year old witch” in the subsequent paragraph.

“You’re already a fine witch, yes indeedy,”

I’m still wrapping my mind around Papa Gilbert saying “yes indeedy,” which seems like a much more ‘Murrican folksy thing to say. I can’t see him picking it up from Jesse or any of the cast we know he knows.

ready and willing to help industrialize Fae agriculture?

Gilbert uses American spelling here.

(She enjoyed solving mazes, ever since an incident where she got lost in a hedge maze at Emily’s manor, and decided she would never again be defeated by one.)

If the specific fact that she got lost in Emily’s hedge maze is necessary for later, I’d suggest either putting it in 1) her little triumph speech after defeating the maze in the book or 2) whenever the maze that recalls the trauma actually pops up. Otherwise, it’s either inorganic
foreshadowing at best or a useless little tidbit specifically put in as a bone to the bonus readers at worst.

Maybe Sarah was expecting war room style tension.

Hyphenation.

“The fellow may have swapped his team colours

Gilbert uses Commonwealth spelling here.

“I share your concern, husband,

For some reason, I picture Jesse saying “husband mine” more than just “husband.”

“Which is why she has to go with is, love.

“us.”

Imagine how quickly the Ascendancy will move to sieze our house…

“seize”

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.
The arc is:
sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)
I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.
The arc is:
sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)
I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

25 07 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’m liking the whole “Gondor Calls For Aid” feel of this book, but we still have two more chapters and no more main characters from the primary series (assuming we get in contact with Benny and Chloe in this one). I suppose the next chapters could cover Yew/Tillman/Carrie, but I wonder.

The arc is:

sf01: Emily/Scout focused (First Age)
sf02: Una/Nel focused (Forsaken Shores)
sf03: Jesse/Gilbert/Benny/Chloe focused (London’s Fog)
sf04: Carrie/Susan/others focused (Second Age)
sf05: Everybody focused (Stars Fall)

I LOVES ME SOME SYMMETRY SOME ME LOVES I

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?
Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?
Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
lirazel

ORLY?

Then where are the anagrams and palindromes?

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.
“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D
Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.
I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?
The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.
“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.
Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.
Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.
“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D
Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.
I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?
The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.
“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.
Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.
Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

26 07 2011
Anonymous

Jen here. I like Jesse’s careful handling of her statements vs. her true thoughts. Very Fae of her, really.

“Crown Prince and Princess” OOOH really? Princess? :D

Interesting reaction there, Lar. And this has been ongoing? Verrry interesting.

I like Wheedle’s pondering on evolution vs. creationism for the Fae. So Camille is particularly good with plants specifically?… hm. I wonder if it’s because of Susie directly trying to teach her, or if proximity to the three Crowns is bleeding over to all the young mages in the vicinity. For example, are the students at the school particularly or peculiarly talented? And we all know Nel was a master illusionist before, but now she’s the Best. Maybe…?

The what exploded, now? Think you lost a word there.

“kill-crazy” is a delightful turn of phrase.

Haven’t seen Sarah in a while, nice cameo here.

Gilbert makes good points as to why they must bring Camille. But another point he doesn’t make is this: If they’re trying to sell a cover story of “just another trip to England as usual” then they really can’t leave her behind or hide her or whatever.
hyphenate: nine year old (two hyphens, two instances)
Typo: non sequitor (nonsequitur), sieze
There were more issues but I can’t remember now. :(

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

27 07 2011
lirazel

BTW — I am having a pretty good time with Blogspot. I haven’t figured out how to make it “thread” comments, but other than that it appears well-behaved.

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