sa09 is, like, all up in the drama

17 03 2011

And that brings us to the serious afterschool special portion.

It’s only two scenes, but one’s 20k+ long, so I guess it counts as a normal-type sized update.

Not much to talk about tonight, so I’ll let the story do the talking. So, was Van what you expected?

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17 03 2011
kamalloy

Oh man. I totally did not see what happened with Van coming, and it was *heartbreaking*. Surprise party. ;_;
I’d guess that Van and his gang robbed a Gatherer depot. Security seems a bit low, but in a sense they’re hiding in plain sight there. (Also, as Jim and Bob have proved, some of the gatherers are definitely high INT, low WIS.)
Oblivion seems like the kind of thing Benny would have picked up somewhere over the centuries. And speaking of Benny, it’s Milton! Never expected to see him again, and it’s fun to see him and Carrie talk shop (literally and figuratively).

17 03 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

In the original rough-pitch versions of this chapter, Carrie was working at Milton’s comic shop when a truant officer forced her to go to school (since despite being an ‘adult’ she was underage). I decided I wanted school to be something she selected herself, as part of her normalization… but wanted to work Milton and a comic shop in again, somehow. Once I decided A) she can’t fly to school without causing serious physics problems and B) I wanted Van to go home with her, I decided to use Milton’s shop as a henge waystation.
You’re right about the Gatherers. Una will speculate as much, in the next bit. Of course, odds are, they were guarding more than just Oblivion if it was an artifact cache like the warehouse Jim and Bob operated…

18 03 2011
eyeless1

Quick comment
Comments link still targets back to the previous LJ entry.
Like the update. I admit I had the wrong idea about Van Buren; I wasn’t looking for a Gatherer plot.

18 03 2011
jengagne

I’m still fuzzy on something. She says she’s a superhero, says she can fly, and Van takes this in stride? I guess he believes her considering he’s seen this crazy gun and there’s magic in the world, but… doesn’t even ask any questions?
Then again I’m pretty tired so maybe I’m just being fuzzyheaded in my rereading. What do other readers think?

18 03 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Re: Quick comment
Thanks. Fixed!

18 03 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Fly can mean ‘airplane’. Presumably you can hop a plane from New Orleans to Atlanta, but as she notes, it’d take too long.

18 03 2011
kamalloy

Also, I wonder if Carrie is familiar with Back to the Future, because I think they’re going to realize they’re dealing with a very similar situation there.

18 03 2011
lirazel

Wait, they have airplanes now?

18 03 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

For domestic flights up and down the coast. Just not out into Kraken territory or, prior to the peace accord, over Fae territory.

18 03 2011
jengagne

Yabbut, there wouldn’t be domestic flights to NOLA (that’s not “up and down the coast”.) Not unless the human-fae cooperation or tourism is even more than I thought.
Anyway, my point was, I was confused (and still am) as to what Van believed of what she was saying and whether how he reacts or glosses it over fits that.
Dunno why it didn’t occur to me before that reading, but, there it is.

18 03 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

I’ll just edit out the line. It’s a basic ‘oops slip’ joke, nothing more.

19 03 2011
jengagne

It doesn’t seem like a particularly _tidy_ deletion so I doubt Van will vanish belatedly.

19 03 2011
Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne

Yeah. It’s a very sloppy edit, one which others can see once they get around the “That’s how it’s always been, right?” initial block of common sense. Like, how could the away teams have scored any goals during games, like it says they did in the school’s records?
On top of that, Van was Oblivion’s current master at the time. That gives him some special exemption from its effects, including no longer existing because his family tree got pruned. But his house went up for sale immediately, since “Nobody ever lived there”.

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