sa01 thinks that mirror needs more soap

6 11 2009

Or at the least, less opera.

So, another day, another scene. I’m kind of enjoying doing these little bursts of updates instead of mega-ones.

Today we get relationship foo and yet more transitional notes on how things have shifted in two years time. Plus, a return appearance by two mysterious characters, and an explanation for a plot hook I deliberately left unresolved. Enjoy. Feedback welcome.

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6 11 2009
tozetre

I just noticed something. Something unfortunate. Something unfortunate about the singular possessive in English.
Anu’s
:T
On the other hand, I’m loving sa01.

6 11 2009
tozetre

Oop, one thing;
“I reallly, really” – too many Ls?

6 11 2009
jengagne

“once cleared of her debt to Emily, she would continue to be the champion they expected of her.”
Should there be a “whether” after the comma?
Yay Anu and Esrever scenes. The intro about Anu’s creation is a twinge expositiony but I don’t see any other way to do it. I’m glad Anu seems relationship-happy despite her social challenges.
At least they’re getting to meet people through their shuttle-service role. That’s probably more than Esrever got before.

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